Casey has Faded

Thank you, I'll be sure to take the advice of both of you into account when I do my final draft

Thank you!

none of the paragraphs copied through....sorry guys.

great poem. I wouldn't change anything.

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I did see some commas *claps like mad* but you might need one or two full stops, and I don't suggest you put them aftera rhyming couplet.....unless there's no other ...

sorry I commented back like this, but I take my poetry very personally, and this poem perticular. thank you for the comments, though.....and sorry about the typos....bad habit.

worms and cars.... have you ever noticed that when it rains,worms come up from the ground? well, I remember in third grade we used to yell at the bus driver ...

timeless is used as a analogy/illusion/metaphor (sp?).....I forget which. timless is solid,unchangable, like statues..... and from our birth asa statue to when the clay has dried, we complain and we ...

I agree, the full stops don't work for this poem. You could add a lot more detail as well, but it is a good, solid start. best of luck.

Okay, now I noticed the title and I can tell why this poem seemed full of 'open air' to me. okay, sorry to bother you...